I’ll write an example paragraph for it:
“Standing no more than 15 feet away, he fired his Hammerdeim directly at the rebel’s head, but, to his terrible surprise, not a single piece of the shot column connected. The last thing that occurred to him as the distinct sound of an enemy Galactic SMG rattled throughout the disused Airport and his heavy frame was riddled with holes, was that perhaps opting for standardized rifled barrels on shotguns at the last Security convention was not such a hot idea after all, and that he might have been better off not bulking-up for all those months to carry one.”
Pretty good huh? How about this:
"His mission was simple. So simple it was the only thing he could consciously think about. They had finally made a big enough push to break through the gate into the rebel homestead. He was going to guard that Maintenance bot with every fiber of his being. He knew it would be hell, but he had all of the necessary tools ready, and a crack team of other highly skilled engineers flanking him around bot- or so he thought. A well-placed enemy blast from a Lobster devastated the front panel of the Bot, completely destroying several circuit panels, fuel lines, and wheel bearings. The concussion knocked him to the ground about 10 feet from where he was standing. After a half-second of discerning whether or not he was still alive, he rushed to his feet, his mission almost pulling him up from the dead.
He saw every fractured part. His mind raced with the solutions for every problem; what parts he need to pull out of his kit and every tool needed to install each one of them. He knew he couldn’t do it alone, but 2 more men of his talent could get that bot up and moving again in a matter of seconds. He looked around in horror, and saw no one. Not only just no other engineers, but not even a single friendly he could recruit as a second pair of hands. Suddenly Chen’s voice cracked over the radio network:
“They’re taking our command post!” followed almost immediately by,
“They’ve taken our command post!”
Concerned only briefly over what relevance this had to his mission, he returned to work, diligently although frightened for his life in such an open and exposed location. He had about a quarter of his work done when again Chen appeared over the airwaves exclaiming “We’ve captured a command post!” tailed by the unmistakable crack of a Barnett long rifle and the feeling like a truck had just crashed with all of its mass into a ten-inch area on his chest. He had been hit, and he knew he was going to die. As he lay there, looking at his unfinished work being destroyed bit by bit all over again, his vision losing its color and crying out for a medic, the last thing he heard was Chen yet again fretting over the radio “They’re taking our command post!” again, followed only a second later by “They’ve taken our command post!”
He knew now where all of his fellow engineers and medics had been."
I’m sure as long as PC players write it, it will be fine. I hate feeling like I’m reading a console novel that was just ported over to a PC book. SD needs to throw their loyal PC-novel readerplayer base a bone, and forget about all these Johnny-come-lately console readerplayers.